摘要:下边以几篇样文特征分析，逐一为大伙儿开展详尽分析。全体同学要认真阅读哦!(注：几篇样文均源于官方网，学生们能够充足学习培训，但切勿抄写原话。)ACT考试官方网改革创新后的创作一部分，*了新样题及评定标准。新的评定标准由4项指标值构成：1.观点及分析IdeasandAnalysis2.对观点从深层和…
下边以几篇样文特征分析，逐一为大伙儿开展详尽分析。全体同学要认真阅读哦!(注：几篇样文均源于官方网，学生们能够 充足学习培训，但切勿抄写原话。)
ACT考试官方网改革创新后的创作一部分，*了新样题及评定标准。新的评定标准由4项指标值构成：
1.观点及分析Ideas and Analysis
2.对观点从深层和深度广度上的支撑点 Development and Support
3.文章体裁Organization
4.语言运用Language Use
4项各自判分，创作的*后得分是这四项的综合性分。
一、开场分析：
I 篇首段：
It is no secret that today’s workforce no longer consists entirely of people. Rather, machines are being developed to complete many of the tasks which humans have traditionally done. This can greatly increase productivity and efficiency of simple, repetitive tasks. Many people view this as a great positive and point out that it leads to a more uniform and less expensive product which is better for everyone. However, some people are more wary of this popular trend of automating the workforce and question whether this progress is truely (并不是笔误，是样文的真正再现) positive. Their concerns, though, are outweighed by the benefits these machines offer. (108字)
段首解析：*篇文章内容的段首写作很顺，It is no secret that…句型进行，到Rather推动，创作的层级逻辑性感清楚可见。随后They can…阐述客观事实，Many people句叙述一般民众对智能化机械设备的顺向了解，However句展现一部分民众拥有的疑虑和忧虑(负面信息的了解)，*后一句用though拉上来，用了一个表衡量的语句 are outweighed by …强调智能化机械设备的好处胜于民众的忧虑。
II 篇首段：
Advances in technology have become so widely accepted in today’s culture that very few people are willing to pause to consider the consequences. People get so excited about what new technologies can offer that they forget to question whether there might be any negative effects. Without caution and deliberation, replacing the natural with the mechanical would undoubtedly be disasterous.(注：并不是笔误，是样文的真正再现)(63字)
段首解析：第二篇文章内容的段首先用一个so…that…句型表明技术性的发展被普遍接纳以致于大家都不肯停住细想其不良影响，第二句再用so…that…句型叙述大家过度热衷于新技术应用都忘记了考虑到其负面影响。2个语句一个从技术性方面导入，一个从民众方面分析，虽都用了so…that…句型，但气魄愈强，水平愈深到末尾句，作者亮明自身的观点，要是没有细心忧虑和考虑，以机械设备替代人力资源将不容置疑是勒索软件的。作者在亮明自身的观点是用了2个很强悍的词undoubtedly 和disastrous, 但是前边有without正确引导的标准语句埋下伏笔，看起来作者的观点不片面性，不极端化。
总结：从论述文的视角看来，第二篇*段(63字)亮明自身的观点十分独特，直截了当。而*篇*段(108字)更好像一个论文综述，分析了正反两方面的趋势，*终也没能直截了当，旗帜鲜明的说明自身的观点，尽管篇数更长，措辞大量，但仍不如第二篇首段更有幅度。
二、末尾分析：
I 篇末段：
Whether humans like it or not, machines are becoming more and popular (从文中就忘写了一个more)in the workplace and are decreasing the need for humans to work those jobs. This can lead to advancement of society, a greater end product or service, and even a lower consumer cost of goods. Many people are frightened of change, but unfortunately for them, the past is gone and now we must look to the future.
末段解析：起句强悍说明观点，不管人们喜爱是否，设备都是越来越愈来愈广泛，控制成本，*工作效率。*后一句号召担心更改的大家能走向未来。
II 篇末段：
Decreasing the speed with which we incorporate mechanical influence is important because of the potential dangers that lurk in blind acceptance. Not only does the preference of the mechanical over the natural interfere with the job market and the economy, but its use also has the potential to seriously degrade our culture as a whole. In combination with the uncertainty surrounding the increasing intelligence of machines, it is most assuredly better for the human species that technological progress be slowed so that we can, if necessary, prevent additional damage.
末段解析：进一步表明缓解设备对人们危害的必要性，由于在人们的盲目跟风接纳中沉寂这潜在性的风险。Blind acceptance映衬段首的without caution and deliberation。记录下来，not only…but句型用层递的方法进一步表明对设备盲目从众的伤害，从危害学生就业*市场到总体文化艺术衰落。*有一句依然用一个表达标准的语句后，仍然用了很明显的用语it is most assuredly better for the human species that句型再度尖锐的的严格执行自身的观点，呼吁大家付诸行动。
总结：因此总体上觉得第二篇的幅度强过*篇，并且在遣词造句层面第二篇也更显功底。例如potential dangers，lurk，blind acceptance， degrade our culture，uncertainty surrounding这些。
美国高校申请办理美国高校技术专业美国高校花费英国大学奖学金美国高校申请文书
为您推荐
